Comments on Rude Awakenings by Radical Yellow Duck

GreatNorthWoodsGirl

This section seems a little too calm and clinical for a man facing almost certain death. Needs a little emotion.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Radical Yellow Duck

Ok, I will try to rework it to enhance the level of panic.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Radical Yellow Duck

Hmm… That should improve it a little.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Stovohobo

Hopefully there’s a swordfish nearby.

Bwa-ZING!!!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
ElshaHawk (LoA)

just evil! how do write your way out of this one?? i’ll just read on..
- Posted almost 10 years ago.