Love can crush you should start a new paragraph.. “It can leave you with regrets and pain. In an instant, it makes everything change” fix it to this, so you don’t repeat change.. put a question mark on ‘how can..do all that’..you’re instead of your in second paragraph..comma after change..

too picky? sorry. next time, I’ll PM you.

Well I don’t know how it was before the edits, but I love it now =]

better. :) the sentence ending in ‘this’ bugs me, but otherwise, you learn fast blu-san!

Wow. AWESOME starter. Of course I’m a sucker for a romance.