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In the dim light I nearly ran into it. Valctor and Feela were sobbing for breath. Both looking to me for a solution. Down the tunnel behind us, the feeders were closing the distance – us, their escaping prey trapped. The passage blocked off with rock.

No other way.

As I unhooked my mask, blood, warm and sticky, ran down my cheek – seeping out of every place worn down and taken over by the living piece of metal and wood that I now pulled away from my face. It felt like I was stripping a layer of skin off.

Tossing the torch down the hall, I pressed my mask to the stone before me. They were watching me, hoping I could save us.

Not us… but maybe them.

I grabbed a fist full of their hair, both screamed. I did too – ramming their foreheads against the mask along with my own. I felt it break in my skull, somewhere near the back.

Sickening motion, and we were on the other side. Always a cost. My mask, destroyed to create and open a door through the rock. My skull, fractured.


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  1. Avatar J. A. Keane

    Surreal, apocalyptic, and somewhat cryptic…
    I see this is a sort of story that would be told by a hybrid of Terry Gilliam and David Lynch, so because of the sheer imaginative detail, apocalyptic storytelling possibilities (“The Feeders”? I’d sure love to see a prequel about them.), and just plain (but good) weirdness, I give this 5 pencils.
    Well done!

  2. Avatar Jae

    By the second paragraph, I was hooked. This was intense and graphic, and I’ve always had a thing for masks.

  3. Avatar shadowlight

    This needs to have a sequel and maybe a prequel written to it. I am going to have to reread it, I think, to get the full effect. Lots of tension that hooked me from the get go. I want to know more about the mask. Was that what was sacrificed for their escape? Wonderful work!

  4. Avatar RoseTone ~LoA~

    I’ll try to get to that sometime soon.

    Yes – it was.

  5. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    After our long conversations, the mask seems all too real; the scars still ache and the loss of the mask still reverberates through the blood.

  6. Avatar RoseTone ~LoA~

    Semi-experience gives knowledge useful for writing accurate works.

    The longer it’s worn, the more it wears down.

  7. Avatar Robert Quick

    I don’t know how I missed this one and I’m sorry I did. This was an exciting and well-written entry. I certainly echo the sentiments of the earlier posters. Somehow you blended science-fiction, horror, thriller, and action against a post apocalyptic back drop. Well done!

  8. Avatar RoseTone ~LoA~

    Glad you liked it.
    My plan is to expound on this – working on it!

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