Seek, Knock, Ask

Avatar Author: shadowlight I've been writing in one way or another for as long as I can remember and before that I was daydreaming (oh, wait...still do that). Favorite genres: fantasy/sci-fi, mystery, suspense, twilight zonish stuff etc. Pretty e... Read Bio

It was a nightmare. Everywhere he looked the same monotonous décor. Doors upon doors. On the walls, the floors, even the ceiling. It was ludicrous. Insane. How could this happen? He must be dreaming.

Sara’s question popped into his head. “How do you open a door creatively?”

He’d laughed. There was no creativity in opening a door. You turned the knob. Pulled it open. If necessary, you used a key. That wouldn’t work here. His pockets bulged with keys. None of which worked.

The question echoed in his mind, in search of an answer. A few hours ago it wouldn’t have mattered. It would have been, to paraphrase, a question wrapped in an enigma. Nothing more.

That was then. Not now. Tendrils of reddish gas seeped in, clouding the dim light. Dizziness filled his head. Doors banged open and shut of their own accord all around him, but locked him out when he arrived. What was the key?

He fell forward onto a door and banged his fists on the wood. “Help me,” he cried.

It opened and he fell.

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  1. Avatar J. A. Keane

    Veeeeeeery creepy.
    The image you’ve created of a space comprised entirely of doors, doors and more damn doors, is the stuff of feverish nightmares.
    The only thing I’d say needed fixing is the last line, as it seems a bit too…sudden, I suppose.
    Unless that was your intention, and the suddeness is symbolic of the nightmare ending, or of the nightmare getting much worse.
    Still, I give this 5 pencils.
    Great work.

  2. Avatar shadowlight

    Hello there. It’s nice to ‘meet’ you. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this for me and for your encouragement. Much appreciated. I agree. I did want it to be sudden…perhaps leading to something else that is unexpected. However, I’ll take a look to see if I can ease the transition a bit. Thank you for bringing that to my attention. That’s very helpful to me. :o)

  3. Avatar August Rode

    Nice! And, yes, creepy!

    Minor nitpick: Instead of “but locked him out when he arrived,” might I suggest “but locked him out when he approached?”

  4. Avatar shadowlight

    Thank you so much, August. I’m glad you enjoyed this. I like “approached” better, but it wouldn’t fit the character count. I’ll have to see if maybe I can rework it after I get some sleep. I appreciate your encouragement. Thanks again. :o)

  5. Avatar Marli

    Shadowlight. Your writing is impressive. I got the jolt when he fell so do not change it.
    I think it needed to end abruptly, like awakening from a dream. Even Alice had a bit of a shock when the rabbit burrow came to an end

  6. Avatar smdasilva {LoA}

    I liked the abrupt ending. What is he falling into? Sounds like a good topic for a sequel.

  7. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    This sounds like the worst nightmare. As Keane said, doors upon doors upon doors upon…
    I like the way you broke up the paragraphs, it seems to be an acquired talent!
    Reminds me a bit of Alice in Wonderland. (Why is a raven like a writing desk?: a question wrapped in an enigma, and the doors is like the rabbit hole, the monster-like qualities of the gas like the Queen or even the caterpillar)
    I love surreality in general. Nice work!

  8. Avatar shadowlight

    Hi Marli,

    Thank you for the wonderful compliment. I really appreciate it. I’m glad you enjoyed this and that you didn’t feel the ending was too jolting or out of place. Sometimes it’s hard to know when the jolt is not a jolt but merely distracting. I’m glad you think this works. Once again, thank you for your kind words and encouragement.

  9. Avatar shadowlight


    Thank you. I’m glad you liked the ending. As to what he’s falling into (or out of), I’m not really sure. Maybe someone else will write a sequel to tell us. :o).

  10. Avatar shadowlight

    Hi PJ,

    Wow, you got so much out of my little snippet. That makes me happy…and it makes me even happier that I can see what you’re talking about. Did Alice ever learn why a raven was like a writing desk? I can’t remember offhand, LOL. Thank you very much for reading and for your kind words. I appreciate them.

  11. Avatar Jae

    Shadowlight, the way you captured the nightmare is disturbingly accurate. I got shivers along my arms and felt dizzy just reading it. Perhaps you write from experience? Top rates, I love it.

  12. Avatar shadowlight

    Hi Jae,

    I don’t think I’ve met you before. :o) Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this for me. I do appreciate it. It always makes me happy when I can put a reader into the story so your encouragement kind words made my day. From experience? shudder. Usually my nightmares are about falling or being chased, or being trapped…so yeah, I guess this could qualify, though I haven’t dreamt of doors specifically.
    Thanks again for reading.

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