Perfectionism Redux

Avatar Author: Trann Husband. Father: two boys. Guinness fan. Scotch whisky admirer. Poker player: live since mid ‘80s; online since ‘00. Activities: goalie (beer league), curler (more beer), golfer (even more beer), soccer (coach and player)... Read Bio

He rarely held the honours that his brethren did but at this precise moment, he would take the spotlight and perform his role to perfection.

The intial move began fast, rising high above the usual positions. It was a flourish, he knew, and he relished in the decadence of it all. At first, he lagged behind but that allowed him the opportunity to separate from the rest, gaining some needed space and making it possible to perform his task unerringly.

At the apex, he was truly suspended in time. There was enough space around him that none of the others could possibly interfere. A quick check also confirmed that the penultimate element had been delivered: his was to be the last, he knew.

The attack began in earnest and, this time, he led the charge. Carrying the weight of everyone around him, he dove down and secured his destiny.

And so it was that the third finger of the right hand, bracketed by his brothers – the over-used middle and quaintly-used pinky – found the period key.

“Nirvana,” smirked the author.

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  1. Avatar Trann

    This is a story resurrected that fits the contest exactly as intended. I was always far too entertained by it so it had to be brought back to life and shared.

  2. Avatar Stovohobo

    A little verbose, but that’s to be expected when trying to get nirvana. I used to get it all the time on ficlets; haven’t yet here.

  3. Avatar Oy

    A Ficly Nirvana story about Nirvana. Nice. I thought it was about fencing until the last couple lines!

  4. Avatar jesteram

    So a story about writing a story to enter the contest won the contest? Not that I’m jealous or anything …

  5. Avatar Trann

    Coolness. Thanks for my first Ficly win.

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