To Take Away

Avatar Author: ~Eagle~My~Beagle I was awayschooled, homeschooled and unschooled as a child. I went on to Thomas Aquinas College and majored in Everything in Particular. I live with four people. One of them likes to wrestle, one has exquisite culina... Read Bio

He had seen the boys through the threshold. He watched them pluck and shake the tree. The leaves came down in a blizzard of green and red. The fruit mashed underfoot, picked up and lobbed at the hedge. They gleefully rent the flesh with their fingers. They didn’t even care to taste.

Julian was heartbroken. He wouldn’t dare chase them away. They were rude and powerful boys. Their parents noble people and rich.

The pears weren’t even that good. Still, he needed them for the winter. Some spiced and preserved, some made into a tolerable brandy. He could feel the warmth of that pear brandy; and yet he knew that this winter, when he comes in from the cold, there will be no warming drink. The juices were gone now, seeping into the earth instead, a drink for the dark shadows that dwell deep underfoot.

Julian could watch no more. He knelt, and cried.

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  1. Avatar Kihd

    Aw. Poor Julian.

    The last sentence of the second to last paragraph is the best. The shadows bit is so creative.

  2. Avatar ~Eagle~My~Beagle

    Thanks. I really enjoyed writing this piece. It was inspired by events described in St. Augustine’s Confessions. He writes that the greatest act of sin is the destruction of a good thing just for the sake of destroying it. Ultimate pride. The flush of power that comes from taking a good thing away from the world. (Also a rebellion against God in essence.)

  3. Avatar ItsMeChristina

    I like the simplicity of the story, and your reason behind it. Your vivid use of adjectives really bring out the setting of the piece. Good job.

  4. Avatar ~Eagle~My~Beagle

    Hey, thanks for the win!