Into His hands

Avatar Author: Radical Yellow Duck Ok, I'm back. One heart attack, a triple CABG (Coronary Artery Bypass Graft, pronounced cabbage) and two sessions of beating my computer into submission. I am back. I'm old. Real old. I'm so old I remember when dial... Read Bio

Linus saw the mans hands were bleeding, from the abrasions. He lay his shin across the man’s forearm and held the spike with the wooden washer poised above his wrist. Placed the tip, just so. Drive it here and the bones will hold it in place. The hammer fell with force, the man screamed. The man’s thumb involuntarily flexed and pressed against his own palm. Each strike of the hammer, driving the spike past the flesh and deeper into the olive wood beam.

Linus moved to the other arm and tried to hold it flat against the wood. Felix, standing behind him, spat on the ground.

“That ain’t how it’s done,” said Felix.

“This isn’t my first.”

“Lemme show you”.

Felix took a length of rope and made a loop he placed on the mans hand. Pulling back he stretched the man out, straining against his pierced wrist. You could hear the man’s shoulder pop as it dislocated. A groan escaped his lips, and Linus Placed the next spike on the man’s wrist. He raised the hammer and struck the second nail into Yeshua, the Nazarene.

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  1. Avatar ItsMeChristina

    The first paragraph is hard to follow because you go back and forth from present to past tense. Also, the character Felix isn’t defined yet, which lead me to first believe that his hands were being pierced.

    However, I did enjoy reading this. The last sentence really ties it all together.

  2. Avatar Radical Yellow Duck

    Ok, I added a bit to try to indicate that felix is a different person than the one being nailed.

  3. Avatar Radical Yellow Duck

    added a bit more and I think i like it a bit better now.

  4. Avatar HSAR

    A very original take on the challenge executed with skill.

    I would suggest anonymising Felix and Linus (since they’re not really important characters).

  5. Avatar Radical Yellow Duck

    I felt that making the romans anonymous would be too confusing in this short a three character story

  6. Avatar Raphael Bane

    This is really bananas (in a good way). The last sentence will stay with me forever.

  7. Avatar The Electric Hillbilly

    Man, u have one cool avatar & name here. Agree with other commenters that the opening sentence is not perfect, but the writing talent here is clear. Great, great!

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