Knighthood for a squire

Avatar Author: Radical Yellow Duck Ok, I'm back. One heart attack, a triple CABG (Coronary Artery Bypass Graft, pronounced cabbage) and two sessions of beating my computer into submission. I am back. I'm old. Real old. I'm so old I remember when dial... Read Bio

The hoofs of their horses thundered below them. Weapons beat against armor in the familiar rhythm of gallop. Speed was the only hope of escape. The king had sought to prove his manhood by leading the raid. It was a trap, and now the only way to safety lay at the other end of the plain. If they could reach it in time.

A gap had opened up between themselves and their pursuers. Now there was a chance. Culotte watched, horrified, as the kings horse stumbled and fell, throwing the king to the ground. He reined in and turned his horse back to the heaped form of the king. He dismounted and rushed to his side.

“Merde, my arm,” said the king as Culotte knelt by him. His arm flopping at mid forearm.

“Your Majesty, take my horse. Go quickly for they’ll be here in moments.”

The king placed a hand on the mans shoulder. “For this, you are knighted, Chevalier Culotte.”

In a moment he was off. Culotte drew his bow. Made ready to slow the pursuers. He would show them how dangerous it is to have Sir Pants on a plain.

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Comments (4 so far!)

  1. Avatar Radical Yellow Duck

    I would like to point out that according to google translator culotte means “panties”. So perhaps the king was going on a panty raid.

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Very dramatic and exciting, so I didn’t even realize it was an entry into this rather silly challenge. And yes, culotte is panties, or shorts maybe depending on where you are and with whom you’re speaking. Nice way to get to the silly name.
    You use fragments a bit. Sometimes it works, but sometimes it winds up distracting. I think the fragment at the end of the first paragraph would have worked if it were set off in a seperate paragraph, otherwise it sorts of begs the question, “Why not just use a comma?” The one in the last paragraph, “Made ready to slow the pursuers,” could just have well just been a clause.
    Nitpicking, I know, but you’ve got some awesome stuff here, and the grammar stuff only distracts from that awesomeness.

  3. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    HAHAHAHA! I thought culottes were billowy shorts with a skirt front, like skorts..
    So, the enemy COULD be barbarian women.. panty raided and angry.. hee hee

  4. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    Hey duck glad to see you are still alive,(don’t take it wrong ficly, duck is like 176 years old and I have been teasing him about it since i found out he worked for the Luftwaffe, but he has an awesome sense of humor) Your story was excellent but i would expect no less from ficlies oldest old schooler.

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