Car Crash Mentality

Avatar Author: J. A. Keane J. A. Keane has spent the majority of his 19 years trying to act like a somewhat normal member of modern society, but seeing as nobody else seems to be acting normal these days (which basically makes the entire concept of... Read Bio

Well, when I say “it” and “she” hit me, I mean to say:

First, she hit me. A sharp, sudden, quick and painful punch in my face. (I distinctly remember the feeling of her skinny knuckles ramming against my skull – bone against bone. And although I don’t remember hearing it, I’m sure there must have been a loud CRACK! as our skeletons clacked together.)

And secondly…it hit me.

Not a sudden epiphany, or realisation, or idea, or something metaphorical like that. (God, I wish it had’ve been metaphorical – it would’ve been a lot less painful…)

No, when I say it hit me, I mean a massive goddamn 4×4 hit me dead on at 50 mph.

And suffice it to say:

IT. HURT

…but only for a moment.

A moment later, I found myself pain-free, seated comfortably, and…

Tied up.

Shit, I thought.

But it wasn’t a thought, because the word echoed throughout the room.

Yet I hadn’t opened my mouth.

I couldn’t.

It was sealed shut.

And then I realised:

I was in the Anonymous Cinema…with the Girl…

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  1. Avatar Abstract

    I like the play on “it hit me”…I hadn’t been going for that meaning, but it was a nice surprise. I also enjoyed his explanation of how it was literal, and not metaphorical.

    One wonders if that was the truck that was supposed to have caused the accident…

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    It has a fun voice to it, a non-traditional sort of narrator that works for the story. I liked the ‘who said shit’ cliffhanger as well. Feels a bit jumbled and rambling in places, but for the most part that seems to work with the narrator’s voice/style/idiom.

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