The Cellar

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“It’s very dark, Mandy. We shouldn’t be down here!” 9 year old Chris said to his 11 year old sister. “I don’t like the smell,”
“Don’t be a chicken, Christopher, Uncle Jack will never know!” Mandy admonished, pulling him into the cellar.
It was a huge room, with rows upon rows of shelves; each row housing 100’s of bottles. The air here was sickly-sweet; grapes and strawberries with a hint of rotten plums. The only light came from the entrance door, from the sunlight that fleeted about the basement through a stained glass window.
There was a creak.
“What wassat?” Chris spun about on a heel.
“Nothing, you baby.” Mandy laughed nervously, “Look at this,” she plucked a bottle from one of the shelves.
“Maybe you should leave it alone,”
“It’s french or something,” she blew the dust off with a puff.
“PUT it back!” Chris tried to grab the bottle from her, and in the struggle the bottle crashed to the floor. The red contents from the bottle splattered everywhere.
Mandy said,“That’s not wine!”
The door slammed shut.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Uncle Jack has a hobby.. I don’t want to meet him, wait.. maybe he’s the Gardener!

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Classic children’s adventure tale sort of stuff here. I like it, though it’s a bit straight-forward/non-dramatic at times, just in the wording. Maybe that was just a character limit thing, or I’m too keen on embellishment. I dunno. Nice entry into the house!

  3. Avatar ALRO613 (LoA)

    ya.. the whole thing is a lead up to the last two lines…

  4. Avatar zxvasdf

    Is Uncle Jack perpetually pale with unusual dental features with a preference for an earthen coffin as a bed?

  5. Avatar ALRO613 (LoA)

    maybe he just holds the blood for the pointy teeth people…who knows… could be anything.

  6. Avatar Sanglorian

    Garsecg really took this one in an unexpected direction, didn’t he? I’d love to see someone take it in the more predictable, bottled blood direction which I thought of when I read this. I’d like to see how the one ficly could spark two very different stories.

  7. Avatar cthulhuburger

    I like that this takes the house in a darker direction. Great description of the smell of the place, too.

    I wish you had written out “hundreds” instead of using “100’s,” though.

  8. Avatar ALRO613 (LoA)

    i did originally, however .. the 1024 restriction forced me to use the numerical annotation instead… and to change anything to accommodate it wasn’t worth it.

    thanks for the kind words tho