...Or Forever Hold your Peace

Avatar Author: Garsecg A very strange man whose strangeness is only partially due to Asperger's Syndrome. He is an English major and now a grad student, in case you couldn't tell, fighting a constant struggle to set aside some little time for ... Read Bio

I should have stopped at least one beer ago. But I barely knew anyone here except her, and I was miserable, so I had a drink to get over the misery, which made me more miserable, so I had another drink. And so on.

I was about to leave when I saw her standing alone, staring off into the distance. I sat on the empty chair beside her. “Hi.” She said nothing, but smiled once she saw me.

I realized I had to tell her here and now or the thought would break my skull open trying to get out. “Listen. I’ve never told you this before but I—I love you. I know you don’t want to lose our friendship, but if it doesn’t work I won’t hold it against you, and Mark was a terrible boyfriend and he’ll be a terrible husband, and you think he’ll stop cheating but he won’t, and I know I’m not perfect but I can at least try to be considerate and—”

She looked horrified. I turned around and saw everyone in the room staring at me, including Mark.

I realized that I probably should have told her before the wedding.

View this story's details

Prequels

Oh no! This story doesn't have a prequel. Want to fill in the blanks and write one?

Sequels

Oh no! This story doesn't have a sequel. Want to fill in the blanks and write one?

Comments (10 so far!)

Average Reader Rating

  1. Avatar Robert Quick

    This feels very real and resonates with me. Nice job.

  2. Avatar Miles Letham

    What a horrifying realization! I like this, especially the bit about being miserable about drinking to keep from being miserable :D

  3. Avatar Megan Kennedy

    “…or the thought would break my skull open trying to get out.”
    You worded that PERFECTLY. So powerful.

    And I may be twisted, but the ending had me laughing my ass off picturing that scene- not because the character wasn’t awesome or sympathetic, but you painted that embarrassing scene so well, I could just see all the angry faces and him in the middle actually feeling relieved.

    Really awesome stuff!

  4. Avatar astronouth7303

    I think that was the beer trying to break his skull.

  5. Avatar Nancy

    Thank you so much for this contribution to my challenge – this is a great piece that resonates.

  6. Avatar smdasilva {LoA}

    I was picturing a guy in a bar, but then you threw me a curve that I loved!

  7. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    I agree with Quick, Miles, and Megan who said all the thoughts I had while reading this. Here’s your pencils.

  8. Avatar Garsecg

    I’m glad everyone liked this piece. Interestingly, it’s the only piece of non-genre fiction I’ve ever written.

    Smd:The last line came to me after I had finished the rest, when I was revising the story of publication. So it threw me a curve as well.

  9. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    That was awesome. You stuck right with the character’s point of view right to the end there for the twist. Very nicely and humorously told.

  10. Avatar Ruby Slippers

    I was really hoping that when his dialogue started it was going to turn out to only be in his head. But then he was actually talking out loud – poor guy! The last line was great, and I liked that you set it up with your title as well.