Rethink Your Plan

Avatar Author: Samantha Lau There's not much to say about who I am, however like most here my passion is writing. I hope to improve my vocabulary and skills in English to one day, hopefully, be able to put my ideas into words in a way I'm proud of. Read Bio

Adele had been okay while she still seemed interested in her, but now her brother, Julian, was who spent the most time around her…

Oh, Julian was terrible with her indeed. He would always pull at her hair, calling her names, forcing her to places she did not want to go to, pushing her, hurting her, making her hide from Adele when the girl was looking for her.

One time, Julian had even ripped her arm apart.
The next day, hair matted from rough manhandling, Julian had pulled off her head. Her head! She was made to look at her headless body for a whole week before Adele found them and put them together! It had been most traumatizing!

Now, as she sat on the roof of her own pink house and contemplated ending it, face painted into an angry scowl with sharpie, she decided it’d been too much. She let herself slide slowly off the roof until she finally fell and hit the ground.

There, laying on the floor, she thought… this would’ve worked better if she had actually been alive, and not just a Barbie doll.

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  1. Avatar gĀ²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    X) That was quite the twist at the end! It was certainly a welcome break from permit-test-studying, I can tell you that.

  2. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    i got the doll feel almost immediately. maybe i’m spending too much time around my daughters ;-)

  3. Avatar Scrawler's Secret

    Another entry that makes me laugh. Now I feel bad for how I treated my barbies though…

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  4. Avatar monkeybomb

    I feel like it gave a little too much away in the middle if you were really going for a surprise ending. Not a bad story in general, though. The doll’s voice is pretty spot-on.

  5. Avatar The Note Writer

    I didn’t expect the twist ending. I just thought it was in the future when people have implants that allow them to survive without heads.

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