Not gonna lie. Owl City has some fantastic lyrics.

Very beautiful and sad, but also quite cold with a detachment from emotion that I don’t normally recognise in your work. That’s possibly because this is the first non-poetry piece of yours that I’ve read in quite a while.

As always, brilliant writing. I can never find any criticisms really. Nice job at blending the song in there – quite a different approach to the challenge, methinks.
Abby x

I’m not familiar with the song, but it’s some lovely visuals. It felt like either a post-apocalyptic sort of place or a metaphorical one, with the rotted house being a past the character is trying to escape.

The last sentence in the first paragraph feels like a run-on and wound up being a bit difficult to follow. Otherwise some lovely writing.

Thanks THX I’ll try to correct that. I quite liked the sentence but I respect your opinion.

very beautifully written :)

liked how the grey started to fade away at the end revealing a new world of color. i really enjoy your writting.

This is such a vivid story! I just imagine everything happening in my mind.