This is a gorgeous piece of writing. The flow is perfect. The phrasing is elegant, almost like poetry.

One thing didn’t work for me and that was your alliteration in the second last sentence. Dance of death was fine, ballet of bullets seemed slightly forced but still okay, but I think you tried too hard and lost the moment with tango of triggers.

The other thing I’d note has to do with two sentences: “Of course, I don’t know exactly where he is. Neither of us do.” Taken literally, you’ve said that he doesn’t know where he is which isn’t what you meant. A bit of rewording would straighten it out: “Of course, neither of us knows exactly where the other is.”

Thanks for the feedback. I had to move a few things around at the last minute, so a few things may have become a little jumbled up.

I’ll edit.