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Avatar Author: Abby (LoA) Gonna miss you guys so much. My 'official/professional' email is: abbywall2440@gmail.com in case anyone wants to keep in touch! Read Bio

I’d always found the seats in the Chamber to be the most comfy of any meeting room. Maybe because of the curve of the bench or the softness of the red-stitched cushions.

My elbows dug into my thighs, fingers smoothed my rapidly creasing brow. The beat of my heart was loud in my ears. Loud like a machine gun, like an explosion.

My head hurt. Hurt. I had thought that being there, in a place of wisdom and peace, would straighten things out. It hadn’t. Reality felt so … distorted.

“What are you doing here?” The intrusion of the voice on my thoughts made me jump.

“I needed some time."

“Time,” he repeated. A footstep as he moved down to the second ring of seats. “You don’t have time.”

“What are you doing here?” I snapped. It was uncharacteristic of our relationship for me to be so aggressive and he knew it, didn’t question it with anything more than a raised eyebrow, another step down.

“Checking up on you.” I straightened up. “What are you going to do?” he asked. Too many questions.

“I don’t know."

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  1. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Intriguing scene, and I liked the jarring effect of the positive description of the place and then shift to his creased brow and elbows digging in.

    That last exchange got confusing. Were the third to last and second to last supposed to both be said by the other guy? If so, the break to a new paragraph is confusing.

    Sort of begs for a sequel, doesn’t it.

  2. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    Yeah, sorry. I’ve no idea why I did that. Fixed now.

  3. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    The feeling is that the person is overwhelmed and went to a comfy place to work it out, but even there he or she is pushed too far. They still can’t think. This is my weekend.. :/

  4. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    Aw, Elsh. The idea is to be relaxed enough to think naturally – unfortunately it isn’t always that easy.

  5. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    oh I get the IDEA, but it never works out as planned…and you’ve conveyed it very well. :)

  6. Avatar Robert Quick

    I like the fact that the protagonist knows they are doing something wrong but can’t help themselves. It rings true. As a warm up piece I think you have continued building upon your legacy rather well . . . and welcome back, Abby. You were missed very much.

  7. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    Thanks! – and to whoever gave me three pencils, can you comment a reason. I want to improve!!!!!! Rating doesn’t help if you leave no explanation.

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