Monster

Avatar Author: Jim Stitzel I dabble a little in a lot of things -- writing, webcomics, gaming, photography, web design, music, and more. I'm a full-time code-wrangler and a part-time farmer with 40 acres, a lot of animals, and far, far too much to do. Read Bio

Slitherin’,
slimy,
goopy and
grimy,
up it comes from the muck.

Tentacles
waving,
bottomless
cravings,
it drags her into the guck.

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Comments (8 so far!)

  1. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    I don’t usually do poetry. I think you can see why.

  2. Avatar remembrancer

    I enjoyed your use of “guck” in this piece. I also found it interesting that you chose to have a line break after “goopy and” instead of “goopy and grimy”. Is the break aesthetic or rhythmic or something else?

  3. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    It’s a little of both. I wanted ‘grimy’ on its own line to match ‘slimy,’ and as it so happened, it set a certain rhythm that I rather liked.

    Living on a farm, we are well familiar with the term ‘guck’. It’s one of our favorites.

  4. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    I like guck; it’s worse than muck.

  5. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Way worse. Requires a whole different set of boots. :)

  6. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    rofl!

  7. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    The imagery is awesome. And disgusting. I love “guck.” Love the smell. Which is tangible. I can feel everything.

  8. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Fantastic! I like that it generates actual physical sensations for you. :)

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