Nightmare Clowns: No Escape

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Anne was standing on her apartment porch when I pulled up, clenching and unclenching her fists in short staccato bursts. At the sound of my car door closing, she blanched and jerked her head in my direction.

I knew she had been on edge ever since her house burned down but this seemed dramatic even for her.

Intending to calm her down, I spread my arms wide and offered her what I hoped was a reassuring smile. “We just moved you in, you’re not planning on leaving already?”

“I can’t stay here. They knew where to find me. They were waiting for me this morning. I thought the fire would stop them but it didn’t!” She grabbed my arm with shaking hands.

“Whoa, whoa, whoa. Slow down there. Who will get you?” I asked.

She took a hand off my sleeve to point down. “The clowns.”

Filthy dolls lay spread out across the wooden planks of the porch.

A creeping dread crawled over my shoulders, stirred by memory. “Aren’t those the same ones that used to give us nightmares as kids?”

“Yes, except for the big one. He’s new.”

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  1. Avatar 32 ^2

    The last line is great, kind of comedic in a way, or just my morbid imagination.

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Yeesh, that was icky, so nicely done and kudos. Absolutely killer last line.

  3. Avatar August 2nd

    I don’t think there’s any way to improve this story, Robert. The dialogue is natural and the horror vibe has just the right intensity.

  4. Avatar As Large as Alone

    I agree with all these comments. Great entry!

  5. Avatar ipe

    Ha! I love the last line as well. Well done.

  6. Avatar DB

    You win this time.

  7. Avatar BiC

    I think this line is best: ‘A creeping dread crawled over my shoulders…’. – Isn’t that exactly how we felt when we saw the picture? – Mr Quick, you wrote it well.

  8. Avatar JonB

    I found his “Who will get you?” a little misplaced, as she doesn’t say that they’re going to get her, in her previous dialogue. Other than that, effectively creepy and a truly excellent last line.

  9. Avatar DB

    @JonB I thought that too at first, but I figure you don’t want this kind of thing to feel too scripted, plus she is in some distress.