A Promise to Return

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Daughter, daughter, why do you cry
In the forest beneath a dying sun

I made a promise with a demon boy
That I would go and not return
Until stars fade from earthly sight
And moonshine tempts tides no longer

But I am scared the night will last longer than any day
And you’ll be gone before I wake
Your flesh withered and dried by time’s steady passing
Your indulgent smile no more than a memory

So mother, mother, please don’t die
For I’ll be back to take your blessing

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  1. Avatar remembrancer

    Unfortunately this one doesn’t start and end with tags but I couldn’t resist finally using the poem tag since I write so many.

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Dark and magical and sad. Feels mythical in its scope.

  3. Avatar Writearound

    It does have a very mythic quality, although it could also be a very current thing described in mythic metaphor maybe. That sense and sometimes fear that parents are mortal and will not always be there is always something emotionally big to process. I liked the idea of a demon boy and how did he extract the promise from her?

  4. Avatar JonB

    This sounds very much like something from the old British folk tradition – as though it could have been unearthed from the depths of Cecil Sharp house. It has that timeless quality about it. Lovely.

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