The Ruin of Shorelocke: The Shelter

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The shelter calls out to Eifan, and he is drawn toward it. A cool breeze blows in off the sea and with it a hint of a voice, as if a vapor. Almost that voice entices him away from his explorations, but he impatiently shrugs it off. There is mystery in that shelter, and he must have it for himself.

He approaches the dark opening of the stone structure and finds himself at the head of a winding stair. The steps themselves are old, crumbling. The walls are covered in moss and seep a dark, ocherous fluid. Eifan reaches out, just brushing a fingertip through the liquid — and withdraws it sharply. A shock of emotion blasts his psyche, there but for a split second and then gone again. It is a rage unlike any he has ever experienced.

A moment’s pause to collect himself, and he descends once more. The flight of stairs is short and within moments he finds himself at the bottom. A room, scented strangely of incense, opens to his right. A corridor, black and forbidding and lit distantly by fire, yawns before him.

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  1. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Each section of this story, Eifan will be faced with a choice. It will be your job to comment on which choice he should make. The one that gets the most votes will determine which way the story goes. Clear enough? Good.

    Two choices: the room or the corridor. Which does he pick?

  2. Avatar Escapist

    The room!

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    I like all the magical elements coming through strongly and effectively. It makes sense to check out the room. I’m with you that the present tense is generally difficult to manage, but you’re doing an admirable job.

  4. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Heh, there was a time when writing in present tense was hard because it was new to me and something I’d never done before. Now I’m completely comfortable with it, almost more-so than writing in past tense. I’m glad you’re enjoying it.

  5. Avatar HSAR

    Room. Always clear the area before moving on!

  6. Avatar Sonata Green

    The room.

  7. Avatar As Large as Alone

    I am late but I would have said the corridor. The Jimmy corridor.

  8. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Boy, you’re kinda stingy with the pencils, aren’t you? Not complaining, just amused. :)

    And don’t worry — Eifan will very likely be back to the corridor at some point. And by ‘likely’, I really mean ‘if something in the room doesn’t kill him, gut him, or leave him catatonic first.’

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