The Ruin of Shorelocke: The Room

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Eifan drags one finger lightly along the door jamb as he enters the room. The door itself has long since crumbled into dust, long since forgotten what it was — but the stone remembers. The memory whispers up to Eifan like a ripple of warm water. He knows he could tease out that memory with the right song, could in so doing restore some semblance of a barrier to the room, if he so chose. He does not.

Instead, he turns his attention to an examination of the room. That redolent scent of incense lingers in the air, but now Eifan also detects a subtle but unmistakable hint of scorched earth beneath that aroma. The smell is not entirely unpleasant, and it interests him, but he chooses for the moment not to pursue it.

Three physical objects lie strewn about the room – a bound volume, stamped with a rune he has not seen in a dog’s age; a small wooden orb, polished to a perfect finish and entirely free of dust; and the hilt of a dagger, the blade strangely missing, as though it had never existed in the first place.

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  1. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Each section of this story, Eifan will be faced with a choice. It will be your job to comment on which choice he should make. The one that gets the most votes will determine which way the story goes. Clear enough? Good.

    Three choices again — the volume, the orb, or the hilt. Which does he examine (first)?

  2. Avatar Sonata Green

    Sing to the dagger, to restore the blade.

  3. Avatar HSAR

    I love the use of “a dog’s age” as a measure of time.

    Who knows what the dagger hilt’s purpose is? The blade may not be in this world.

    I say the orb.

  4. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Apparently I’ve done my job well with this segment. I have one vote each in the comments here for two of the items in the room, and one vote from Twitter for the third. I tried to balance the descriptions for the items so that no one stood out as extra special to readers.

  5. Avatar Escapist

    I vote the orb!

  6. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    And there’s a tie-breaker. Any other votes before I pen the next section later?

  7. Avatar Sonata Green

    I like the implication that he has seen the rune before. Too often it’s just “a mysterious rune” or some such.

  8. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Which is exactly why I decided to give Eifan a connection to the rune. He has a long and storied history, and occasionally things from his past pop up in his world again.

    Everyone’s comments so far are making me feel really good about this section because it sounds like I accomplished all the goals I set for it. Thanks for the feedback!

  9. Avatar As Large as Alone

    The dagger; turn to page 43.

  10. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    -checks book-

    But… but… my book doesn’t have a Page 43….


  11. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    My vote is the orb.

    Very good job of an ‘in the moment’ description that also gives hints to larger culture, magical abilities, history, etc.

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