I feel this sentence might need to be flipped.

>“Suit yourself,” Jack began to make his way back to the glass door.

Jack began to make his way back to the glass door, “Suit Yourself.”

Hear to here.

I like how you’ve read back through your story to construct Jack’s response “Names aren’t important.” Nice attention to detail.

Yeah. That would sound better & thanks for the advice on the tags! I didn’t know you could do that. Thanks for reading. I’ll be “off the grid” over the weekend. I won’t have much access to a computer, if any and I don’t own a smart phone (still using an archaic flip phone) so, won’t be online too much. I’ll be back on Sunday or Monday and trytocatch up on reading and writing at some point. Thanks again!

Changes done. Thank you!

Your chapters work much better than the tags, people will know how far to click back. I’ve never thought of that, so maybe my idea doesn’t work because others who sequel/prequel will have to do the same tag and won’t do it. Your chapters in your titles is best.