Better than the first

Avatar Author: Vail Indigo Just a girl with a love for words. I write fiction, erotica, and really mediocre (at best) poetry. I think I've been doing this all my life. Read Bio

I hadn’t been this nervous since high school and my very very very first date.
But it became a little bit like panic when I realized I couldn’t seem to buckle the ankle strap and might have to wear a not-planned-for-a-week pumps.
Jenny’s laugh was amazing. I’d never seen someone become so open, so vulnerable like that. I heard her in my mind and, like a zen koan, I was suddenly in the moment, smiling, letting myself enjoy it.
The doorbell. I ran downstairs, almost falling thanks to one shoe on, one shoe in my hand.
I opened the door and she just glowed. I don’t remember saying anything. She cocked her head to one side, slightly.
“Are we having some issues?” She nodded at my problematic heel.
“Um, yes, I think, I…” I know I was blushing, and suddenly she was on one knee, slipping the shoe on my foot. I almost gasped as her fingers worked the buckle.
She looked up at me.
“I don’t think I’m supposed to be dressing you until our third date.”
She let the warmth of her breath glide along my inner thigh.

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  1. Avatar Nancy

    Love, love, love that there’s a sense of what came before and what’s coming next… and, I must say, I don’t think they’re waiting until the third date!

  2. Avatar Vail Indigo

    I actually hadn’t decided what would come next. I just adored that final image so much, I wanted to stay there forever

  3. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    mmm, i like stories with heels!

  4. Avatar Nancy

    That final image is so good I don’t want to write a sequel… I’ve got to take the plunge and write one at some point… but I don’t know if I can keep your momentum up.

  5. Avatar Vail Indigo

    I think you can, from everything I’ve seen, when you just write, it works
    I can’t wait to see where you go from this moment

  6. Avatar Nancy

    still pondering…

  7. Avatar Vail Indigo

    so much thinking…
    For me, writing is more like what kerouac called ‘spontaneous writing’. Like dancing. I don’t know what I’m doing, I just have a couple moves I want to make sure I include. They provide the tiny bit of structure I improvise on.
    (which isn’t to say I don’t go back and edit, but the first stuff out, for me, needs my head to stay out of its way)

  8. Avatar Elice

    I love Jenny’s overly confident, in-your-face type attitude, and I love how enchanting that makes her. I agree with Nancy, great imagry.

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