Love After Death (Poem) (Tag Cloud Challenge)

Avatar Author: j. smthng The best thing I ever wrote was a cheesy poem-satire about unrequited chocobo love. ... Also, I can get pretty verbose sometimes. The Ficly stories are good for me because I'm making an effort not to sequel myself (an... Read Bio

The summer’s light on watery waves
Came shining through the sky.
Aboard a flawless sailing ship,
The guests sat close and sighed,
And watched, beneath an arch of wood,
The groom stand waiting by.

A box was wheeled along the deck
As petals led the way;
It stopped before the somber priest
Who raised his arms to pray.
And shivering, the crowd grew cold
As he looked down to say:

“Arise, O Bride of M—ton;
Rejoin the ranks of life.
Thy widow calls us here today
So thou can be his wife.”
He clasped his hands; the groom stood stiff;
the box began to writhe.

Through splintered wood, the corpse arose;
She faced the screaming guests.
She moaned a deep, low cry of pain
And fell upon the chest.
“My dearest Jane!” the groom cried out
And rushed to her defense.

He pulled a scholar from the crowd
And held to her his head.
“Please feed, my love,” the groom implored,
While others watched in dread.
And forty-seven miles from shore
His zombie wife was fed.

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  1. Avatar j. smthng

    (Written for “The Tag Cloud Challenge”)

    I interpreted the challenge as “grab 6+ tags from tag-cloud and write an entry with those themes.” I used a random number generator on the first ~112 tags (before the alphabetization, figuring they were the most popular tags), and it went something like this:

    • marriage (okay)
    • summer (okay)
    • beautiful (yeah, okay, fine, whatever)
    • POETRY (oh crud)
    • water (argh, this is going to be so trite)
    • zombie (all right!!)

    (Then, I threw in some other tags that seemed appropriate.)

    (It is somewhat debatable whether this really counts for “beautiful,” or, for that matter, “marriage.”)

  2. Avatar Aurelia

    This. Is. AWESOME!!!! Poetry is so hard… and you did a fantastic job, rhymes and all!

  3. Avatar j. smthng

    Thanks Aurelia! Poetry isn’t typical for me, so I’m glad to hear that someone else thought it scanned okay. :)

  4. Avatar OrangeOreos (LoA)

    XD

    That was one of the best poems I think I’ve ever read on Ficly! Especially for someone that doesn’t usually write it! Great, great job!

  5. Avatar g²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    I echo Orange, that was fantastic. And, surprisingly, this is the second zombie/nautical-related piece I’ve read in less than a month.

    I don’t consider myself a poet either, so this is awesome on two levels: the entertainment-overall-feel level, as well as the you-pulled-it-off-spectacularly level. Most excellent.

  6. Avatar ♦ Jenunique ♦

    Oh my god! I loved this!! And trust me, as many times as I have said it, it never seems enough, I don’t read poetry. This is fantabulous. See it even deserves it’s own squiggled adjective. (Gotta love spell check sigh ) Definitely worth more pencils than I have been allotted to give.

  7. Avatar Brebelles {LoA}

    SOOO Good! you should do more poems/ :)

  8. Avatar j. smthng

    Thank you for all the kind words. :)

  9. Avatar Jessica Cahill

    Man, this rules.

  10. Avatar tas_13

    wow. you’re awesome dude!!

    amazing!

    -tas_13

  11. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    amazing completely amazing you are the bees elbow
    hey you should get a pic because this is a goos pic and that would embarassing for you to get a featured author spot and not have a pic

  12. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    i meant good fic instead of goos pic what was i thinking?

  13. Avatar j. smthng

    I’m not really a pic person, but if you think it’s a good idea, I’ll take the advice. Thanks. :)

    tas_13 – “dude”, eh? I’ve been wondering if (without a bio) people would think I am a boy or girl, young or old, white or black (or both or something else), American or non-American, etc., based on my writing. :)

  14. Avatar j. smthng

    (Edit note —

    changed from:
    He grabbed a portly scholar and
    He held him to her head.

    to:
    He pulled a scholar from the crowd
    And held to her his head.

    though now I think the repetitive "And"s are too glaring.. oh well.)

  15. Avatar OrangeOreos (LoA)

    Hey, congrats! You won! This was just too awesome for me not to pick it!

  16. Avatar g²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    Orange picked a fine entry; well deserved recognition, congrats!

  17. Avatar j. smthng

    Oh hey!! Thanks. :)