Chain of Order

Avatar Author: NightMaiden I am now convinced that you only need a few things to survive: literature, music, creation and communication [no matter how bad it may be ;)]. Read Bio

Yesterday, Nina was taken to the port.

She cried too much for my liking – it made me want to cry, too. She made us sweets and left them on the counter with a note blurred and softened by tears; it was just like her. She did it despite the beating she earned for show and harboring of affection.

Nina was evacuated. Lucky.

The rest of us stay here, on Earth, at home, awaiting the attack like dumb ducks. Responsibility is mine. The little ones look up to me now for explanations. I have none. Who would?

We have been left behind: we are of the Older Generation, and thus imperfect.

I’ve seen pictures of the new planet, from the television – glimpses of blue and green and otherworldly spaces. We here at St. Sophia’s humble orphanage will never see it up close. It’s a place that, according to the Guard, is not fit for lowly, weak creatures like us of the Older Generation.

Newer, stronger specimens have evolved, sloughing off weaknesses.

Mercy, remorse, guilt; compassion? Weakness.

Love? A thing of myth.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    but Nina had compassion, or affection at least.. she was just young.
    What I like about this is the odd world you’ve created, but there are so many questions!

  2. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    elsha you have questions about5 everything she cant give you all the answers thenj you dont get to dream.

  3. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    i liked it

  4. Avatar Stovohobo

    Well that sucks.

    Very well told, though. =)

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  6. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    of course I have questions! I try to prompt people to write more! and of course you need to leave questions in your writing! I love to dream…

  7. Avatar blusparrow (LoA)

    hahaha elsha, you and your questions =). Ouch… I don’t know what I would do without compassion. I guess the next generation of us would prob have no compassion since it is a big weakness but then again it gives us a lot of strength and drive. tough topic to think about. very good piece =)