Just One Bite Of The Apple. (Part 1 Of The 4 Part Miniseries)

Avatar Author: Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA) We were two against the world. Now the odds are slightly against me. Read Bio

The detective gig gets a little slow, in the winter. I guess the regular stiff ain’t as jealous that his dame is trying to hamstring him when it’s below zero. You know, more murders are committed at ninety two degrees than at any other temperature. I know I get a little down in the mouth if its too freakin’ hot. So when it gets a little slow I do a little side business, investigating, deleting and altering inside my client’s minds.

When I was in the army, I worked for the central investigation division who
trained me in just this sort of mind erasing.
The process is very simple; we jack in to the clients mind, and then use nanites to send electrical charges to specific areas related to that particular memory. So for example, if your husband slept with your best friend, then you reconciled, but still couldn’t get it out of your head, you come to me.

I had done this a million times, but none of them were quite like the day I went into the mind of little twelve year old, Chelsy VanHoffman. A.K.A Lillith.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Apple and Lilith, could this be from a garden in a tale spun so long ago and written in a famous book? winks

  2. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)


  3. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    Elsha helped me with these she is so awesome that it made these stories good.
    well i think so. it was fun written em anyway. thanks elsha you rock.

  4. Avatar Not You (LoA)

    I think the garden story, is out of copyright, so i doubt moses’s lawyers will come calling.

  5. Avatar Max Sterling

    detectives and nanites, two of my favorite things, I haven’t read the other parts yet, but this looks awesome.

  6. Avatar The Fantastic Mister Fish

    omg i dont know what a nanite is

  7. Avatar The Fantastic Mister Fish

    omg i dont know what a nanite is

  8. Avatar Stovohobo

    Cool tone, and the ending is unexpected enough to keep me reading.

  9. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    your welcome, MJY.

  10. Avatar Chakatreamentinnahouse (LoA) Fool

    Say dawg…where you get them nanites from? You been holdin out on me?

  11. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    @Chaka about the nannites..they dont have any leg to em. Yeah the charge is like that WaWaWa charlie brown bizzle but it doesnt last as long as long as dollar chinese food.

  12. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    Plus if you are gonna wait like the magi for paul at the walgreens the bizz better last as long as you been calling from the dang payphone, feel me.

  13. Avatar Chakatreamentinnahouse (LoA) Fool

    yeah but sometimes you be in it strictly for the wawa’s ya feel me:)