Intergalactic Human Hell

Avatar Author: Violet Turner A writer who tries to explores the human heart, as passionately as possible. Any criticism or advice would be greatly appreciated! Read Bio

Vance struggled to keep his hold on her shoulder as he was dragged away by force. Erin could still picture the hands of the Northern Martian humans, her own countrymen, beating Vance, a Southern Martian human, with crudely cut steel chains that cut his skin until blood gushed. But Vance did not put up a fight, nor did he shout & curse; the reason she had always loved him. The only resistance he made was to grasp onto her, for fear of parting from her. Vance was no stud; he had no virility or absurd amount of pride. But he was caring and thoughtful. These traits were almost always valued by Erin, but not at times like this, when she was forced to play the part of the rescuer.

The couple had known that crossing the volcanic mountain range that separated Northern Mars from Southern Mars was prohibited. North Martians must stay in Northern Mars, and South Martians must stay in Southern Mars, on penalty of death.

Yet Erin refused to be torn apart from Vance, simply because of humanity’s lust for power and pain.

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  1. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Romeo and Juliet on Mars?

  2. Avatar Violet Turner

    Funny, because I didn’t think of R&J when I wrote it – more like Berlin Wall meets triumphant heroine. Thanks for commenting and rating!

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    I liked the gender-role switching. Had a very tragic, sad feel to it, which worked nicely for the subject matter.
    In that first paragraph, did you mean they were beating him ‘into’ chains, or maybe they were beating him ‘with’ chains?

  4. Avatar Violet Turner

    Definitely with! Thank you, THX.

  5. Avatar stargazer1960

    I see the R &J vibe too and I like that she is “saving” him. I think it might be cool if the references to geography were simply “North” and “South” and then add the Martian element in the last part. Might be a nice surprise!

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