Quickie

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Emma and Robert are sitting in the quiet non-smoking area of a bar in a five star hotel. The plush couches and soft pillows exude an opulence that neither is quite accustomed to. Raucous laughter drifts from the smoking section. Emma orders for both. “Something not so pink, if you can manage.” whispers Robert. “But I like pink and it’s just so girly, don’t you think? But for you …”

While they wait for the drinks conversation drifts hither and tither until with butterfly tenderness it comes to rest on the subject of sex. A pause. Emma rises without a word and saunters around the corner. Much too quickly she returns “Nobody there. Come now!” Hand in hand they slip into the girl’s bathroom and close the door to the cubicle behind them.

She fumbles with his belt and zip. His pants drop to the floor. He twists her around, pushes her hands against the wall and breathes “You’re sexy” He lifts her dress and slides the panty down to her ankles. With quick thrusts he fucks her until they both orgasm simultaneously.

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  1. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Not sure what the challenge was, but…there you are. A couple of typos in that first paragraph were distracting, and her dialogue sounds like she’s ESL (English as second language).
    Overall though, fun, naughty, amusing little idea.

  2. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    thanks THX, edited

  3. Avatar DoItForScience

    This requires a mature tag. Don’t move? How boring.

  4. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    damn character limit. i could not fit in more than “don’t move”

  5. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    lean over
    nice ass
    love you
    so hot
    Just some other phrases you could try ;)

    Or, you could focus more on the bathroom scene and less on the bar.
    But it is a close space, and two people are in it, so it qualifies. :)

  6. Avatar DoItForScience

    lol Elsha… or maybe “I’m Dan.” or “be gentle” or “be rough!”

  7. Avatar Raegan Dauterive

    Not bad, but I agree that he could’ve said something more interesting.

  8. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    i give in. i’ll change his words if you agree to rate it higher.

  9. Avatar LaraLustre

    Damn! I loved ’don’t move.’ Anyone can be complimentary; takes a certain kinda someone to be commanding.

  10. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    that’s exactly what i had in mind. but it seems my domineering nature is not always appreciated. and just because of that i’m giving myself 5 pencils

  11. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    hahahaha! “Insert your own phrase here” because you can’t please everyone. Don’t move worked, she probably couldn’t in the small space, anyway. He just didn’t seem like the commanding type, gently whispering not to get something pink to drink. ;)

  12. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    And it seems she initiates..

  13. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    dominant all the way. but considerate. don’t want to embarrass the waitress.

  14. Avatar DoItForScience

    If I don’t want her to move, I’ve got rope, tape, and restraints. “Don’t move” is reserved for when I’m feeling lazy or between stages. Yeah, you gotta be considerate. So here ya go, re-rated.

  15. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    it was a quickie after all. no time for rope and spreader bars. “Don’t move” seemed appropriate.

  16. Avatar Mr.Gabriel

    Nicely done! Haha, kinda made me laugh.

  17. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    my first feature. yay me!

  18. Avatar LaraLustre

    Of all the stories in your oeuvre to be featured!

  19. Avatar Marli

    Its no use telling people to get a bed…is there? lol/ Wham bam thank you mam.
    5 pencils for taking it all the way….

  20. Avatar Henjo

    Whoa a bit strange You could write reviews for Porno sites ! (joke)

  21. Avatar Krulltar

    With all these comments and being featured, I’m surprised not one single person has called you to task on promoting unprotected amorous sex! For shame, Pyropunk! For shame! :)

    I didn’t get a chance to read the story before the edits, but it seems like “don’t move” fit the situation. Sex with strangers is akward enough, and it’s even harder to smooth talk while trying to get it on in the ladies restroom.

    BTW, congrats on being featured!

  22. Avatar Pyropunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    who said it was unprotected?

  23. Avatar Tamara G

    It was good!

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