A very effective tone change here – I like how you’ve tackled the effects on two different characters rather than just two different character’s outlooks on a situation…

I forgot to mention on the first one, as with this one, that some clearer paragraphing would help with readability, but the content is interesting – thanks for entering! MH :)

ah, well, he was violated.
The juxtaposition of the two tales is a great contras; one shove and one’s life is great, while the other’s is terrible.