We can’t live parallel to each other anymore.

What a great line.

Packed full of wonderful one liners tied together with a highly relateable story of growing older. Excellent stuff, PJ.

The last paragraph seems off somehow. I think it’s the next to line. Reads a bit rough and disrupts the flow. Which is a shame seeing as the lines bookending it are so good.

Pinky promise and throw away the key is a really sweet line, by the way. Really catches this wistful remembrance of innocence vibe.

Next to last* line.

Just pretend that I didn’t screw that up on the first comment, eh?

Well i don’t know how to change that at the moment but I’ll have a think :)

This is really beautiful. Almost moved me to tears. Well done

Beautiful. And so true.

This has been nominated for the ficly book.

Oh, cool :) Epic

Well deserved :D

So much time covered and so much said in such a small space. That would make such a wonderful book.

This is absolutely fantastic… I wish I knew what happened to cause the shift.

So beautiful.

first off, congrats on being featured.

This is a fantastically moving piece, but I have to agree with Thelonious, there is just something missing in the last paragraph. “Your news tore you apart” is just too ambiguous, and leaves way to many unanswered questions.

I like ambiguous :(

Bravo! PJ. just a little thought"The" News would have them all guessing rather than “your” and flow better. But I am only offering a suggestion. ‘V’

Just amazing. Love it!

@Marli, I like :) I think I’ll amend.

I agree with the wonderful comments above. You have touched something in all of us and now we are all wistfully remembering those childhood friends that maybe got away. Great one!

This is amazing, filled to the brim with the bittersweetness of remembering one’s childhood. Great job.

absolutely amazing..

I only wish I had someone like this in my memories. Perhaps it would make it all the harder for losing them, but I suppose that’s just me being selfish. Lovely job.

“Then the candyfloss turned to concealed beer, hidden in backpacks till the adults were out of sight.”

I love this line the most. It really shows how time passes from being a kid to being a teen/young adult.

Overall, it was great. :)

Thank you :)