my number was 53, so I got the word until.

This was rather disturbing in a weirdly good way.

I’m wondering the husband’s motive, but then again that couldnt possibly be described in 1024 characters as well as the murder, but it was well written.

actually I’m thinking about making a sequel about the husband’s motives. I’m not sure though.

I really enjoyed this as the story went well.

If I might offer a little (teensy weensy) bit of advice: get into the habit of proof-reading your work before hitting the publish button. Everyone makes mistakes, me as much as anyone (probably more!), but for your own benefit if you can minimise them it would be better for the overall affect you would have on readers. Especially readers who are writers, are far more easily distracted, and critical, when it comes to spelling or grammatical errors.

Just so you know, and can edit them out if you like, it should be ‘break the skin’, and ‘dying,’ not dieing (or is that an American way of spelling it??? oops). Lastly, the thought sentence “I have a reason to know why I was being murdered” changes tenses. It would be better if it said “I had…was being” or “I have…am being”.

Seriously, I do not mean to be nit-picky, because I loved the story, but I appreciate people giving me feedback to improve my writing, so I feel obligated to return the favour. :O)

And just so nobody lambasts me, my intentions with my last post were honourable, hoping to constructively critique, not run anyone down.

That said, I also am aware that some of my sentence structure in that comment was clumsy (and maybe even badly grammarised?), but you cannot edit a comment without deleting it.

ok thanks for letting me know. and don’t worry I like getting feedback. bad or good. I like to know what others think of my work.