I like this, but the sentence beginning “below the capital” breaks the flow of the story for me, I am not sure what it is about that particular sentence so I apologise.

I’ll think about that but I’m not sure how to amend it. I get what you’re saying though it does seem to stint the flow.

Wow. I wonder if that’s how the president is sometimes. He can’t see whats really going on. Best way to describe this for me was:

:O

I really liked this peace.

i like the society created here, so many possibilities..

Wow, it kind of sounds as if the people have gone from the frying pan into the fire? Well written and thought provoking piece.