Some interesting themes here. It’s a modern twist on the ‘friend zone’, thanks to the same gender attraction.

Minor points: You mention the eye color twice, so it winds up redundant. At the end I’m pretty sure the girl across the booth is not Melina, but not entirely sure, just something in the wording.

Lots of promise here, of a story and in the writing itself.

I made two teeny tiny edits which may make a change in the reading =]

I like where you took the beginning. I understand this feeling well. And there’s a nice opportunity to continue. I may just give it a crack/ whenever my inspiration comes back.

oh! waited too long.. yes.. the hollowness

nice ending. very ironic. but i want to know whyyy