oh PJ! hugs you are a shining star! No more grey!
I like this piece, it speaks to me, of me at times as well.

I like the structure :) and that you stripped it of rhyme (even a lil rhyme goes a long way— not that I follow such advice but it’s true). This has a hint of a solemn, dark desire, and there’s a bare, vulnerable, overpowering element of truth jutting from the ashes. You display the complexity of truth and emotion with the simplicity of expression so well!

I really like the poetic phrases which jump out every now and again between the more succinct, matter-of-fact lines, almost.

Very human as well, I thought – it helped a lot putting in things like the cow line – it seems to make it less observational and more personal.

Not, though, that this can be personal – surely – you’re full if life!

Well done anyhoo – MH :)