Nie description of what i’m guessing is a transformation of a werewolf. That being the case I didn’t quite get the last sentence, as the wolf wasn’t mentioned until then or even alluded to. Maybe you meant something else? Or did I miss something?

The wold is ‘me’; as in the protagonist is no longer conscious in the mind and the wolf takes over slinking into the literal darkness. It probably isn’t very clear.

I particularly liked that last line – the idea of the wolf being a separate entity sharing a body… That was a parallel I wish you’d explored a bit further actually.

In that, the physical sensations detailed here are eloquent and descriptive, but the emotional, even ethical side of transformation is something which isn’t explored so much, and which I think – particularly as your final line stands out to me so much – could strengthen the piece.

Good work, with the capacity to be more uniquely engaging – MH :)

Well if I have some time I’ll try and edit around your comments. Thanks, Ed.

Nice description of a werewolf change, yeah.

I like how the moon stains… that’s a neat way to describe it, and also like ed said, how this person becomes the wolf yet remains who or what it was before the transformation— that is what stood out to me too because usually the wolf and the person/ thing ‘lose time’ during their prowl and then have to figure out what happened with ripped clothes and the faint taste of blood on their lips. xD very cool story!