Something slightly more rambling than my output from the last couple of days. An extract from the life of Harlan Actual, a man lost in the 21st century.

I’m not sure exactly what classifies as ‘mature’ but if anyone thinks that metaphorically flaming penises do, I’ll make sure to add a mature tag.

Rambling story apparently gets a rambling comment, too. I liked the language here a lot, but left feeling a bit confused about this guy not liking the pregnancy. Pros: Prometheus reference, “detritus.” Cons: “shovelware” feels out of place, overall huh?

I think you may be right on “shovelware”. I like to mash together words from all over the lexicon to see how they rub against one another. Sometimes it works, sometimes not so much.

I like the rambling tone. It’s not clear how he feels about the pregnancy, which is spot on in my opinion.

I get the impression that the protagonist is educated. I imagine a young bohemian of sorts, probably with a pony tail.

I was unsure about the language until I got to “I am post-modern Prometheus and my cock is aflame.” It’s just the right mix of classical reference, contemporary philosophy, and irreverence to fit the sort of man I suppose the narrator to be.

I agree about “shovelware” I’m not sure if it’s too recent, too technical, too specialized, or used by too specific a group, but it just doesn’t fit.

This is amazing. I am in love with your line about spitting life into pelvic petri dishes. Keep it up love.

As a fellow Crazed Biologist I like it.