Straight up awesome. I loved the line about fiery lust. Not sure what it has to do with pastries, but I don’t care. Exciting stuff.

I almost wanted the voice to be some sort of fire witch, muahaha. This is a great stand alone piece, though it deserves a prequel to give us how the fire started and who he is and where he is.. he or she.

Actually Elsha, that was EXACTLY what I had in mind when I wrote this. I actually wanted to produce an apparition walking through the flames at the part where it said “I turned, a pleading look.”

Unfortunately, I was fighting the word limit to the bitter end on this one. I lost :’( But I am very glad you enjoyed it!

@ THX, the challenge isn’t actually about pastries, but how a character might feel about ESP.

My one and only complaint about this piece are those last three words. I’ve never understood how a character can relate something that happened to him after he’s already been killed by that event. Other than that one thing, though, this is a very intense piece that begs further elaboration.