Yow. I can’t stress enough how much I enjoy stories that have a twist I don’t see telegraphed from the beginning. Ghost stories that catch me get extra points. The implication of who she is and why he sees her so often is masterfully done.

I like it, but for some reason the second to last paragraph doesn’t feel right. Maybe it’s the rational description of his mood against his irrational behavior.

It’s certainly original, and that’s always a plus.

I like it, and while I understand it, I feel confused still when it ends, even on a reread. There is just this vague sense of confusion to it for me, and I don’t know why.

Not really helpful, I’m aware. I guess I’d like to know more of the story, a more fleshed out something or another

wow this is freakin amazing i am so sorry i never saw your work before this is incredible.
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Thanks Joe. I’d have more stuff on here but I’m on a two month streak of writers block. I just don’t have any stories that move me. Hopefully soon!