Tragic and bittersweet. It reads like a portrait of sibling loyalty. The goodbye a year ago was a little vague, but it felt intentionally so, which worked okay. That first sentence was a doozy, bit of a hard read. Some grammar/style differences than what I might do, but overall a touching little story.
seems he is really depressed, and suicidal. Not quite sure about the ‘goodbye a tear ago’ line either, but if you imagine he went to college, then returned, it kind of makes sense. Bittersweet piece, this.
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