Oh God… It gives me shivers to read it and I feel more than a little sick.

I like that we don’t really witness the act, it’s all about the emotion. About feeling dirty afterwards, and the father countering that by saying she was good… therefore ingraining that into her psyche.

You always astound me with your writing.

Yeah. I felt more that a little sick writing it. But thanks :)

dude, if she was only budding, how little was the brother? this is insane.

Well that was disturbing. Nicely done for the effect I’m guessing you were going for. Yep, horrific scene but well executed in terms of writing.

Elsha – that was kind of the idea. Did you read the challenge guidelines?

Disgusting. This story exists for shock value alone. The Ficly equivalent of torture porn. If this was meant to somehow honor the memory of a murdered child, it fails in my eyes.

Terrible things happen to children, but this feels exploitative.

@cthulhuburger: I’m sorry you feel that way. It certainly wasn’t intended that way. It was meant to fulfill the challenge requirement of childhood being lost in a brutal and awful way.

I’m sorry if it upset you, but it did have a mature label. And quite honestly, I think it would have to go into a little more detail to be considered porn.

Anyway, I’m sorry if this upset or offended you.

Well.

That was something.

Whoo boy.