The Lonely God

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He walks slowly, each lumbering stride carrying him a dozen leagues. Entire villages are crushed beneath his feet; whole nations are shaken by his passing. He cares not one whit. He strides through them like they are grass. They are insignificant in his eyes, for they forgot him long ago.

He chatters with himself for, as the last of his kind, there is no one else with whom to talk. He is the lonely god — and he is stark, raving mad.

“What will it be, Bronze? What will you do now?” he asks himself.

“This,” he replies.

He stoops, and the land beneath him shudders. With his hand, he scoops up a mountain, brushing away dirt and stone until only the thumb-bone of a titan remains in his palm.

“Ah,” he says. “Right where I left it.”

He grins and plops one end of the bone into his mouth, sucking fiercely upon it.

He stands again, and resumes his plodding. The lonely god will not come this way again.

He has that for which he came.

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  1. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Trivia: this piece shares a universe with another story I’ve published here. I leave it to you to figure out which one.

  2. Avatar Stovohobo

    Wonderful imagery and word choice—the mystery of his actions makes me ask if it’s madness or some greater symbolic significance (actually that’s more my analytical laziness at the moment). The auto-dialogue works well, and your penchant for preposition placement adds a nice archaic tone for which I hold great admiration.

  3. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Sadly, that’s the way I usually try to write. I loathe ending sentences with prepositions. :)

  4. Avatar boxofun

    Very nicely written, we’re completely pulled into this universe in just a few sentences! Now I wonder how a nation can forget such a big god.

  5. Avatar Shamaliane

    I love that he picks up a mountain. Pretty awesome.

  6. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    @box — Let’s just say, Bronze didn’t always walk in this form.

    @Shamaliane — I wanted to go big. None of this gods-are-basically-glorified-men business. :)

  7. Avatar Crown Me Tarzan, King of Mars

    Very cool. Intriguing, cosmic, even kind of scary. Makes me wonder what the lives of the people in this world are like.

  8. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    In a word – epic. (And I don’t bandy that term around lightly.)

  9. Avatar Robert Quick

    Hi Jim! Welcome back.

    I’ve always liked stories about madness, especially ones that have loneliness as a component. The Titan suggests a greek connection but it’s hard to tell for sure. If it is Greek, then my question is where did the rest of the gods go? Interesting. Very interesting.

  10. Avatar Emilou

    oohh… I would love to know where he’s off to next!

  11. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    The Greek connection is entirely coincidental, I assure you.

    @Emilou – as would I. :)

  12. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    This character is a freakazoid! And you delivered it beautifully! LOL

  13. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. :)

  14. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    Sorry I missed you out. I was aware of it – was working my way down the list but that was taking ages so then I started from the bottom and the bell went. Anyway…

    I like the tone of the entire piece. It’s a challenge to write with such a distinctive ‘fantasy’ voice, and you manage it very naturally. I enjoyed the use of present tense as well (everyone knows it’s my fave).

    As for the plot itself – the ficly stands very well alone: encapsulating one moment while telling a longer story about the god.

    For such a brutal character, I felt quite a lot of sympathy for him. The bitterness of being forgotten stood out more than his madness to me. Interesting though – I don’t think I would have defined him as a god without your label. He has the physical strength/power but little intelligence. And surely a god is only a god as long as they are worshiped.

    Overall, a great ficly which I enjoyed very much =) Thanks for entering the challenge!!

  15. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    I suppose that taps into the philosophical question of — What makes a god a god?

    Glad you enjoyed the story, and I figured you were aware you’d missed commenting on it. It was just a great opportunity for punniness. :)

  16. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    Congrats on the feature!

  17. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Thanks! :-D

    I’d just like to thank my mom, my agent—

    gets handed a note from off-stage

    Oh, nobody cares?

    Oh.

    sniffle

  18. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    Hehe awwwwww. XD

  19. Avatar Timbertoesa

    I love the imagery of the god strolling through nations like grass. Beautiful and fearsome. I would have loved to have kept reading.

  20. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Thanks! I may be developing this series further. I have a couple of different directions I’d like to go with it.

  21. Avatar Riley

    AH! YES!

    If my eyes do not deceive me, this is Greek Mythology! C:

    I love you.

  22. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    It’s not, actually — at least, not deliberately. This is a different sort of god, and the titans in this universe are of a different sort, as well. There are also golems, sorceresses, and a lot of other beings you won’t find in Greek mythology. I’m glad you liked the story, though! :)

  23. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Bizarre little story. I liked it, and it read well. I have no idea where it could go or from whence it came, but that’s okay. Mostly I just like the imagery of this giant deity sucking on thumb.

  24. Avatar ethelthefrog

    I, too, liked the “like grass” image. Ah, we’re all allowed to be lonely, but we must control the outward expression of our emotions, lest we go about ripping up mountains…

    Great pictures, good mystery; asks all the right questions to get the audience wanting more.

  25. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    @THX — Do you really expect anything from me that isn’t bizarre? :)

    @ethel — I’m actually a little surprised at how much that phrase resonates with people. It’s one that I probably spent the least amount of thought on.

  26. Avatar Demi Beneke

    I love the imagery here and I like how it so easily relates to everyone in some way

  27. Avatar H.S. Wift

    I tried finding the other story. I gave up. Kinda convinced myself it was ‘Worldbreaker’ for a time, but then I questioned whether or not you’re the kind of writer who’d write about the same universe in two completely different times. Just tell me what it is, maybe?

    The bit with putting the bone in his mouth made me think of a dog. It was a weird image of a giant Jackal rummaging through mountains for old bones.

    This was actually very well written, despite implications of caninity, and thoroughly enjoyable to boot. Still wanna know what the story was.

  28. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    It’s this one: http://ficly.com/stories/20667

    The link between the two stories should be fairly self-evident. :)

  29. Avatar Scrawler's Secret

    This story simply leaves me satisfied. About as satisfied as the god who now has his buried bone.

  30. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    He does really like that thumb bone…

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