The first paragraph was enthralling. I jumped into the story at once with the metaphorical imagery. I really enjoy your style of writing. It is clean, straight to the point, and most importantly your own take on things.

@LittleSecrets thanks, it is my first one on here in a long while. I appreciate the input.

I actually thought I had a decent chance of taking the prize here but after reading your entry I was a little premature in my thought process. You killed it with this piece and quite honestly you got my attention on several levels. Nice job! Hope to see more of your stuff on here.

This was really well done. I particularly liked the dual-meaning for “state”, which you cleverly linked back into the metaphor.

Wow, Thanks!