I love the flow of this. :D Leaving the part out that they were mother & children towards the end was also a very nice touch. :)

Nicely told and rife with human sickness, the corruption of youth, and doing wrong for its own sake. Brilliantly tragic.

You do a great job of painting a very complete picture in such a confined space; I really like that.

I like the last sentence… I’m not sure what it means exactly, but I’m thinking if it were a dude, it probably would be a wet mess in the underpants

Ah, way to twist the woman into a criminal mastermind! I thought the man was in a car in the prequel, but this could be another.

@ElshaHawk: i’m sorry if my prequel confused things, this is an entirely different scene.