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The more I thought about how to respond to him, the more questions I had. Does he want to know the truth, that I am fed up with this journey? Would he still love me if I wanted to call for a hero right now? Does he really care for my feelings?

“I.. am tired, and sore, and not feeling very pretty right now.”

Dan sat down beside me. He let out another long sigh. I was sure he was annoyed with me for being.. weaker than he was.

“Kelly, I don’t expect you to feel pretty all the time. When you are sore and tired, angry, upset, or depressed, I want to be the one you talk to.”

I froze. This was unexpected.

He went on, “I will always try to make things right, whether that means walking to the nearest town for a tow truck, or stopping in the middle of the day to ask if things are right between us. I want to make you happy. Forever.”

“Oh, Dan. That’s so sweet!”

“I don’t need fancy gear, or fancy clothes, or even a working SUV. All I need is you.”

Dan pulled a ring from his pocket. “Will you marry me?”

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  1. Avatar DjDashy (LoA)

    Please, explain to me how this was made to be intentional? (facepalm) (rubs temples in confusion) >.<

  2. Avatar DjDashy (LoA)

    But again, very interesting twist! xD

  3. Avatar DjDashy (LoA)

    Oh, wait. Disregard my previous comments. after reading this several times I think (keyword being “Think”) I understand this now. God, it’s a horror show trying to pick through your mind. :)

  4. Avatar DjDashy (LoA)

    and do realize that it is now (checks watch) uh, 3:30 AM so be aware that I take no responsibility for any spelling errors or for that matter, whether any of this makes any sense at all.

  5. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Hee hee, comments at 3:30 AM are fun!

    I was going for ‘intentional’ like he wanted to set up the perfect proposal; that there was a reason they went through the stress, and it was a beautiful reason.

    You will get to know me through time. I don’t usually write the sappy lovey-dovey stuff. :) This piece just led me there. I really wanted to throw in another twist! I just didn’t find the place for one.

  6. Avatar DjDashy (LoA)

    I’m not the type for that either. Like you saw, immediately I had to put these two in some sort of danger :) A perfect, one night camping trip with a happy ending wasn’t in my agenda. I love suspense and danger, so when I write, I give my characters (And my readers) a ride of a lifetime throughout the story.

  7. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Well, we can torture them much more.. heh.

  8. Avatar DjDashy (LoA)

    Yes. Let’s!

  9. Avatar ethelthefrog

    Oh, the best laid plans for a proposal.

    Keep it simple, I say.

    Fun times.

  10. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Well, that was unexpected! Sweetly written, especially in terms of painting very well her level of insecurity so that the ending has more punch.

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