oh my…this is VERY good.

Didn’t see it coming at all, even after I’d already read your comment on the challenge homepage. ‘Drury Lane’ rang a bell for me, but not enough to tell me why…

I like.

too funny! So unexpected.

@ scratch: Same here – I saw “Drury Lane” and couldn’t come up with what it was tickling until the story told me, and I cracked up.

A style thought here – the flow broke up a little bit for me between the dialogue, which seemed to flow pretty traditionally, and the non-dialogue, which was a lot punchier. I don’t know how I would fix this in Ficly’s short format, though – I really like the “sharp” lines you used and wouldn’t want to lose their impact by softening them to match the dialogue, and I suspect that roughening up the dialogue (maybe by inserting thoughts within a character’s lines?) would take up too much space.

Anyway – great comedic take on the muffin man… the bastard! This one could be even more fun with some sequels, I think.