T.S. Eliot It Ain't (Poem Challenge)

Avatar Author: Textual Phoenix A former Ficleteer. Now, I am a Ficly acolyte - a Ficlyte, if you will. (You can thank uselessness for that term!) Spread the word, brothers and sisters! :-D 10/23/13 - Over 2 years since I last posted something her... Read Bio

I’d like to write a poem
With all my shriveled heart
But ponies and flowers
And ivory towers
Just aren’t my kind of start

We’ll change the pretty ponies
To demonic, Hell-born steeds
With tales and manes
Of underworld flames
Yes, this is what it needs

The flowers are not flowers
But giant, carnivorous plants
Devouring meat
To them as sweet
As sugar is to ants

As for the ivory towers
I’ll leave well enough alone
With blackest magics
And lives so tragic
Eating at the stone

Yes, this to me would be a start
Though, to some, poetic sin
It may annoy
But I do enjoy
A tale where evil wins

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    haha! way to use the same style I did and write a clever, twisted, and silly poem. Awesome manipulation of the nice elements to evil.

  2. Avatar Textual Phoenix

    Yeah, the rhythm of your poem seemed to fit what I wanted to do. Poetry isn’t really my forte, but once in a while I like to try. :-)

  3. Avatar Mighty-Joe Young (A.K.A Strong Coffee)(LoA)

    this is a good poem i love this
    and T S does have a comedic side read puffrock
    i think this is awesome

  4. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Hilarious and whimsical little anti-poem. I can’t say I like tales where evil wins, but I do enjoy a good skewering of some the conventions of poetic verse.

  5. Avatar Sam Ervin

    This is great. It’s well written, it doesn’t feel awkward, and it’s kind of funny, just to think about it.

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