awww, the feeling is lonelyness is very strong in this one. very good sensory details =)

Wowness. The feelings, like sparrow said, are Very strong; and the sensory details are vivid in this small tidbit of verbage you’ve given us. This was a very real glimpse into a teens life – been there, done that :P

really good story, I now feel slightly depressed. I think I’m gonna go and listen to walkin on sunshine to cheer me up.

That is a compliment by the way
Andy G

Beautiful. The first line really grabbed my attention.

I am being carried along. It’s very heavy, but we have to confront the heavy bravely. When it’s there.