Ooo, such a nice edge to the last bit! I hope folk feel like sequelling! I like this, not sure about the God parts, but it seems to flow well in there.

hydrogen atoms.. on another planet perhaps? The ominous character is well defined in his condescending comment. very well done! the beginning sets his up for something epic.. so i’m sure people are loathe to enter, the bar being set so high. :)

Moooore!

Yum.

You’re setting up quite the villain there – as a Brit, the sarcasm is highly appreciated…!

Interesting mix of the techy science stuff with religion – could provide the basis for an interesting backstory/context for your wonderfully named main character…

Great word choices and imagery as well – a really well-rounded piece with tonnes of potential… MH :)

Neat start and a great way to set up a really epic feel to the story.