Into the third paragraph, this was really quite saddening – I imagine this kind of situation to be quite hard on the brother as well – wanting to see his sister do well like the protective type he seems to be…

GU really is going to have a tough time judging this – pitting the newbies against each other is going to leave some writers out in the cold! MH :)

I’m at a loss… how can you claim your prize (should you win) if you’re character is in 9th grade?

she’s in 8th grade, her older brother is.

Is that not clear enough?

Umm… not really, no. I thought that whatever school 8th grade is in (elementary, methinks) topped out at 8th grade. 9th grade happens somewhere else (high school?)

Ignoring what I may or may not know about the american educational system, a great story.

Oh, and what’s her surname?

Oh right, well where I’m from, Middle School tops off at grade 9 (or, again, ninth grade, depending on your location). I guess it got a little lost in international interpretation.

Her last name is Mulligan.

Typically, elementary school is kindergarten through fifth grade, middle school / Jr. high is 6-8, and high school is 9-12. Not that it really matters too much, but yes it would be difficult for Bryn and her brother to be at the same school. Plus, her brother being a freshman he would be at the bottom of the pecking order. Regardless, it’s nice to meet a new character!

I was going to edit to make it fit American school, but then my story wouldn’t work. So I’m sticking with it.

After much thought and deliberation at my tedious retail job, I have decided to make editations to better fit the setting.

And her last name is now Melrose.

(as HE dropped her off; and it was exactly as she expected and AT the same time..)
hm, a grand entrance..

American elementary school ends in eighth grade. Ninth grade, also referred to as freshman year, is the first year of high school. Just to clear that up =]
And this challenge takes place in an American school.

That said…YES! A homeschooler! I was homeschooled for a while, I considered making Laura a former homeschooler, but I’m glad I didn’t so that you could. Awesome!

Well I hope to play it out well… seeing as I never got homeschooled. And she’s not odd because she was homeschooled, she was homeschooled because she’s odd. (believe me, she is very odd)

Well, I like her. And if you have any questions about homeschooling, you can always note me!