’bout time she realized this is no time to slack off!

I like – _ The only things she had known in life was of subservience and circuitry…_ Seems most appropriate to the theme and would make for an awesome first line. Speaking of awesome: what happened to [LoA]?

I’ll take your comments on board and see if I can rearrange it to make it a first line.

i love this story and i like sir bics comment if it were in the first person but it isnt so i dont think it will. but this is amazing