A great story that might need a hair more detail at the end. The narrative is awesome (especially for me, who did high school theater). A few notes:

“yak, yakking” either to “yak-yakking” or “yak, yak, yakking”.

“I’m suppose to” → “I’m supposed to”.

When she rants on about the actors’ whining, it seems to veer from the self-absorbed voice she would mimic. Something a bit shorter and sharper – “Is my make-up right, does my costume fit right, is my hair cut the way they want it?” seems a bit more reflective of the narcissistic morons she hates.

The ending is VERY open-ended – which I can like, but without a sequel, it feels a little too directed to wild reader interpretation. Is she the makeup artist for a zombie theater troupe? Has she kidnapped and killed an actor? Is it Acting Hell™? Either a detail or two more, or a sequel, would have really topped this off.

But I liked this a lot – it spoke to me in terms of real experience, which means it can speak to everyone. Quite awesome. :D

TextMason, I appreciate the critic and the kind words. I agree with everything you said, however I didn’t have enough story to continue this, nor enough letters to explain better. The protagonist was a make-up person in a morgue.

I totally got that, Wyatt… but maybe that’s because I have a character who is also a makeup artist in a morgue. I imagine your makeup artist as a crotchety old lady even though it was apparently a guy.

Figured it was a tight-fit issue. And that confusion only affects the end of the story, and that only partially. The main text of the story was still what I enjoyed. I’ll keep an eye out for ya. :D

I got that it was an undertaker/ funeral home person. Perhaps a mention in the tags if you don’t have room in the story?

There’s a glitch in the second paragraph with the _ .. _ part; the italics don’t come through on my computer (maybe just me?)

Only thing I’m left wondering – how does he hear them? Imagination? Or actually hearing the ghosts?

that is to the imagination of the reader april. like can the family hear stewie grffith or not its been eight and we still dont know. it should be open ended good job wyatt

April, in the first paragraph he tells you he is not taking his meds. The second paragraph is in italics here, so it must be you.